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Each deck reviewed by an AI editor through the Storymakers lens — narrative arc, opening hook, closing call-to-action, and action-title quality. With a one-line verdict, top strengths and weaknesses, and three concrete fixes per deck.
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morgan stanley virtual hk summit march 2022
“A standard Macquarie investor-relations template with a clean section spine and a handful of strong declarative titles, but no SCQA arc, a buried thesis, and a 26-slide appendix tail — useful as a teaching example of IR structure and of how 'topic labels vs. action titles' diverges, not as a Storymakers narrative exemplar.”
↓ No thesis slide in the first 5 pages — opens cover→disclaimer→agenda→divider→'at a glance', burying the 'why own us' answer
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rmb morgan stanley conference quilter september 2019
“Competent investor-conference update with a clean three-pillar spine but missing the Complication and a real close — useful as an example of pillar structure and callout discipline, not as a Storymakers narrative exemplar.”
↓ No Complication: the deck never names the problem the strategy is solving, so 'Business initiatives' (p10-14) feel like activities rather than answers
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ey ivca monthly pe vc roundup january 2023
“Competent monthly market-intelligence roundup with rich data but pure topic-label headlines and no thesis, build, or close — useful as a teaching example of why action titles matter, not as a Storymakers exemplar.”
↓ Five consecutive slides (p.21-25) share the identical title 'Spotlight: PE/VC credit investment deal trends' — readers can't navigate the build
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goldman sachs dec 2023 final 12 5 23
“A competent investor-conference update with a strong closing thesis and solid peer-benchmark titles, but the front half buries the answer and the growth pillars aren't MECE-framed — use p.5-7 and p.12 as title-quality exemplars, not the overall structure.”
↓ Opening three content slides (p.3 'Overview', p.4 'financial performance detail') bury the lede — no thesis until p.13
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jpmc esg report 2021
“A polished ESG disclosure report, not a story-driven deck — useful as a reference for quantified callouts and pillar dividers, but a poor Storymakers exemplar because it leads with topics, never states a thesis, and ends in appendix.”
↓ Titles are nouns, not insights — most slides in the first 25 use topic-label headlines with no verb or claim (p.5, p.6, p.7, p.14, p.20, p.21, etc.)
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2024 Barclays ESG Conference Presentation
“Competent IR-style conference deck with clean chapter structure but thesis-lite opening and topic-label section dividers — useful as a teaching example of section-divider rhythm and SCQA Question slides (p.24), not of action-title craft or opening/closing discipline.”
↓ No thesis slide in the first 5 pages — opening is a standard corporate intro, not a Storymakers hook
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20230530 A long way down Credit Suisse Rolf Sethe 11th EBI Academic Debate
“A chronologically compelling academic-debate narrative with a strong scandal-cascade spine and two genuinely original conclusions, but it buries its thesis behind seven 'Contents' dividers and repetitive price-delta titles — use the scandal-walk (pp.15-27) as a teaching example of dramatic sequencing, not the deck's structure.”
↓ Seven 'Contents' section dividers (pp.2, 5, 7, 9, 11, 28, 35) instead of named MECE pillars — the deck's structure is invisible to the reader
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The Dawn of the Deep Tech Ecosystem
“A well-researched BCG/Hello Tomorrow landscape report with strong analytical build in the France section, but structured as observational reporting rather than a Storymakers argument — use p.30-38 as a teaching example for benchmark storytelling, not the overall spine.”
↓ No recommendation/resolution pillar — the deck ends at success stories (p.39) then appendix, so the problem framed on p.32 ('France Could Increase its Presence and Funding') is never answered
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Deloitte Global 2024 Gen Z and Millennial Survey Country profile: Netherlands
“A competent survey-data country report organised as a topic dump with noun-label titles and no arc or close — use it as a counter-example of what happens when action titles and resolution are missing, not as a Storymakers exemplar.”
↓ No Situation→Complication→Answer→Resolution arc: p.2 jumps straight from methodology into a topic parade with no central tension or thesis
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The Logistics Property Handbook 4.0 Investment & Financing Keys
“A competent but inert market handbook with pockets of strong declarative titling in the regional KPI sections; use p.10/p.13/p.16 as action-title teaching examples, but not the overall arc, which lacks both a thesis and a close.”
↓ No thesis slide and no recommendation slide — 27 pages without a 'so what' makes this a reference document rather than a persuasive deck
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EY Academic Resource Center – mission
“A curriculum catalog masquerading as a deck — the Helix worked example and Tufte build are useful teaching artifacts, but the overall structure is a topic dump with no thesis, repeated titles, and a diluted close, so it is a counter-example of Storymakers discipline rather than an exemplar.”
↓ Nine consecutive slides titled 'Analytics mindset competency framework' or 'Master case study guide' with no differentiating action titles — the reader cannot navigate by page header
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Global Assignment Policies Practices
“A competent survey-report deck with strong evidentiary density and some good action titles, but structurally a findings dump rather than a Storymakers narrative — useful as a teaching example for declarative-title rewriting, not for arc design.”
↓ Opening wastes 5 slides on cover/TOC/intro/methodology before any insight — the BLUF (bottom line up front) is absent
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AI Healthcare Errors
“A well-evidenced analytical case-study tour with strong mid-deck action titles, but it lacks the SCQA opener and synthesis closer needed to work as a Storymakers exemplar — use slides 9, 15 and 16 for teaching declarative titles, not the deck's overall arc.”
↓ No SCQA opener — the title promises 'preventing healthcare errors' but no slide in pp.1–8 sizes the error problem or names the Question
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Namibia Budget on plate 2019-20
“A topic-organised PwC budget walkthrough with strong data and decent callouts but no thesis, no MECE pillars, and no recommendation — useful as a counter-example for action titles and closes, not as a Storymakers exemplar.”
↓ No lead-with-the-answer slide in positions 1-3; the deck never tells you what PwC concludes about the 2019/2020 budget
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Lazards Lcoeplus
“A best-in-class industry reference report with strong MECE bones and several insight-bearing titles, but as a Storymakers exemplar it fails the answer-first test and dies in an appendix — use individual slides (p.5, p.32, p.39) as title-craft exemplars, not the deck as a structural model.”
↓ No answer-first opening — 4 slides of front matter before any claim, and no executive summary up front
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Monitor Deloitte’s 2022 Chief Transformation Officer Study — Designing Successful Transformations
“A well-scaffolded research report masquerading as a deck — use its MECE divider structure and evidence mix as a teaching example, but not its titling discipline or its missing recommendation act.”
↓ Action titles are question labels, not insights — ~20 of 29 slides reuse the section question verbatim, forcing the reader to mine the callout for the point
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Multi-regional transmission model
“A competent analytical build-up of a proprietary simulation tool that collapses in the final act — useful as a teaching example for problem-framing and quantified callouts, but a cautionary tale on section architecture, topic-label titles, and the absence of a closing recommendation.”
↓ Broken section architecture: Roman numerals skip II and V, 'IV' appears twice (p.30 and p.33), and p.35 is a one-character divider ('U') — this alone signals the deck never got a final pass
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Ipsos Global Health Service Monitor 2023 WEB
“A well-organized survey data report, not a Storymakers deck — use the section scaffolding and THE HEADLINES pattern as a navigational example, but it is an anti-example of action titling and has no closing argument.”
↓ No recommendation or 'so-what' act: the deck ends in appendix + methodology + corporate slide (p.30–p.45) with zero synthesis
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apr12jlovelock 840572
“A data-rich Gartner webinar deck with strong metric-anchored titles in the middle but a missing thesis-up-front and no recommendation close — useful as a teaching example of quantitative chart titling, not as a Storymakers narrative arc.”
↓ No thesis up-front — the Russia-Ukraine cover (p.3) is not answered by an executive summary slide; the viewer waits until p.9 for framing
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KSA Banking Pulse Q3 2024
“A competent quarterly data-pulse with strong insight-bearing action titles and consistent callouts, but as a Storymakers exemplar it fails the arc test — no thesis up front, no recommendation at the close — so use it to teach action-title writing, not narrative structure.”
↓ No answer-first opening — p.1-p.5 never state the deck's thesis; the reader waits until p.7 to learn earnings grew 5.3%
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LCG SMA
“A polished but conventional asset-manager pitchbook — strong on credentials and a few sharp action titles, but it buries the real 2025 story and ends without a recommendation; useful as a teaching example of topic-organized brochure structure, not of Storymakers narrative.”
↓ No SCQA opening — pages 1–5 establish firm scale ($4.1T) but never name the question the deck answers; the reader has to wait until p.18 to find the real story (2025 underperformance).
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presentation us tl strategy sma
“A textbook 4Ps JPMAM fund-marketing deck with a strong analytical middle (Case + Process) but a credentials-led opening and a data-dump close — useful as a teaching example for action-titled industry-trend pages and case studies, not for SCQA narrative structure.”
↓ Thesis is buried: pp. 1–7 are cover, TOC, divider, and firm credentials; the strategy itself doesn't appear until p.8 — no 'lead with the answer' slide.
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Barclays Credit Bureau Forum 2023
“A competent investor-forum container with strong per-slide action titles in the BU sections but no forum-level story arc, weak opening, and a non-existent close — useful as a teaching example of good quantitative action titles, not of Storymakers structure.”
↓ Nine-slide run pp.14-22 all titled 'Cloud Technology Platform' — pure topic labels with no insight, no progression, no action title
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Barclays Bank PLC H12023 Client Information
“A competent creditor/investor information fact-sheet with pockets of good action-title craft on capital and liquidity, but structurally it is a topic sequence without SCQA, pillars, or a stated thesis — useful as an example of quantified callouts, not as a Storymakers narrative exemplar.”
↓ No opening thesis slide — pages 1-3 are cover and entity-structure context with no stated question or 'so what'