AI critiques

Storymakers reviews of every deck.

Each deck reviewed by an AI editor through the Storymakers lens — narrative arc, opening hook, closing call-to-action, and action-title quality. With a one-line verdict, top strengths and weaknesses, and three concrete fixes per deck.

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GoldmanSachs · 2023 · 58p
Fresenius SE 2023 06 13 14 Goldman Sachs 44th Annual Global Healthcare Conference
“A standard corporate IR deck with disciplined callouts and one strong transformation thesis (ReSet→ReVitalize) that is buried on p.18 and never re-asserted at close — useful as a teaching example of how topic-label dividers and an appendix-heavy tail dilute an otherwise defensible narrative, not as a Storymakers exemplar.”
↓ Thesis buried until p.18 — first 5 slides are cover/disclaimer/agenda/divider/generic context with no stakes or answer-first framing
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DeutscheBank · 2023 · 53p
Deutsche Bank Q4 FY 2023 Presentation
“Competent earnings deck with a strong thesis-led opener but a noun-titled mid-section and a flat 'Outlook' close — use p.2-10 as a Storymakers exemplar of leading with the answer, not the overall structure.”
↓ Segment pages (p.21-25) revert to noun titles — 'Corporate Bank', 'Investment Bank', 'Private Bank' — forcing the reader to extract the insight from the callout
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Deloitte · 2024 · 17p
Technology Trust Ethics Preparing the workforce for ethical, responsible, and trustworthy AI: C-suite perspectives
“A competent survey-findings report with strong stat-led slide titles but weak narrative architecture — useful as a teaching example for action titles at the slide level, not for deck-level Storymakers structure.”
↓ No Complication/tension act — the deck never states why ethical AI readiness is urgent or what goes wrong without it
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EY · 2021 · 35p
Global Employee Survey – Key findings and implications for ICMIF
“A competent research-findings deck with strong mid-section action titles but a methodology-heavy opening and a non-committal close — use slides 8-13 as a teaching example for declarative titles, not the overall structure.”
↓ Opening wastes 6 slides on methodology before stating any insight — the thesis should lead, not follow the demographics
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McKinsey · 2022 · 11p
Battery materials demand and supply perspective
“A competent McKinsey market-perspective deck with strong quantified action titles in the analytical middle, but it opens without a thesis and closes on 'unknowns remain' plus a generic 'Conclusion' — useful as a teaching example for action-title craft (p.4–9), not for full Storymakers arc.”
↓ p.11 is titled 'Conclusion' — a topic label, not an action title — and offers no recommendation or next step
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SimonKucher · 2023 · 16p
APAC Family Office Study
“A competent thought-leadership study with strong analytical-section action titles but a weak narrative spine - useful as a teaching example for action titles and pull-quotes, not for opening or closing craft.”
↓ Opening trio (p.1-3) is pure front matter - no thesis, no stakes, no hook before p.5
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misc · 2023 · 31p
The Anholt-Ipsos Nation Brands Index
“A competently structured research-findings deck with two pockets of strong action-title craft (pp.21–24) but no SCQA arc, no answer-first opening, and no recommendation — useful as a teaching example of clean chaptering and isolated action titles, not as a Storymakers exemplar.”
↓ No answer-first opening — five slides of cover/TOC/methodology before any finding (p.9 is the first insight)
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misc · 2024 · 16p
Our life with AI: The reality of today and the promise of tomorrow
“A well-evidenced public-opinion research report with elegant chapter framing but topic-label titles and no recommendation — useful as a teaching example of strong evidence/callout pairing, not as a Storymakers narrative exemplar.”
↓ Action titles are poetic topic labels not insights — 'The promise of tomorrow.', 'Around the corner.', 'A generation away.' force the reader to decode each chart
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misc · 2021 · 14p
CCPC INVESTMENTS RESEARCH
“A competent survey-readout deck with strong declarative chart titles but no narrative spine — useful as a teaching example for action-title writing, not for Storymakers structure.”
↓ p.2 'EXECUTIVE SUMMARY' is sparse with no synthesized thesis — wastes the highest-attention slot in the deck
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KPMG · 2024 · 16p
Captive Insurance Guide
“A competent educational primer that reads as a topic-ordered brochure rather than a Storymakers narrative — useful as a counter-example for how topic titles and an appendix-heavy close drain persuasive force.”
↓ Every section title is a noun phrase — 'Structures', 'Key players', 'Lifecycle' — none carries an insight or recommendation
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RolandBerger · 2023 · 12p
Decarbonization in ports and shipping
“A competent thought-leadership / business-development deck with strong action titles and a clean macro-to-micro context build, but it stops short of a recommendation and pivots to firm credentials — useful as a teaching example for action-titling and SCQA setup, not for closing the loop.”
↓ Self-promotion crowds the narrative: p.2, p.3 and p.11 are credentials/RB-targets slides in a 12-page deck — 25% of the real estate is about the firm, not the client problem
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misc · 2020 · 41p
2020 Effie UK Report • In partnership withIpsos
“A competently structured industry-report deck with strong action titles and good evidence pairing, but it never leads with the answer and ends in a contact card — use its title craft and case-pairing rhythm as the teaching example, not its overall narrative arc.”
↓ No thesis upfront: p.4 and p.40 are both labelled 'EXECUTIVE SUMMARY' but neither callout reveals a synthesised answer — the deck never tells you in one sentence what the 2020 effectiveness story is.
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Deloitte · 2020 · 23p
2020 Deloitte Human Capital Trends: Government & Public Services Insights
“A disciplined three-pillar framework deck marketing a Deloitte+Oracle HCM service — structurally MECE but narratively flat; useful as a teaching example of parallel section architecture, not of action-title writing or resolution.”
↓ Action titles are almost entirely topic labels ('Purpose', 'HR imperatives', 'Oracle Cloud HCM Enabling Capabilities' reused verbatim on p.10, p.15, p.20) — a reader skimming titles cannot reconstruct the argument
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IPSOS · 2024 · 16p
our life with ai google ipsos report
“A well-structured thematic research report with disciplined one-stat-per-slide craft, but it reads as a findings document rather than a Storymakers-grade argument — use its section scaffolding as a teaching example, not its opening or close.”
↓ No thesis slide in the opening — foreword (p.2) talks about the study, not the answer; reader reaches p.5 before encountering a finding
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BoozAllenHamilton · 2020 · 25p
original
“A competent investor-relations deck with a stated thesis and solid supporting data, but as a Storymakers exemplar it fails the arc — no Complication, no Resolution, and topic-labeled data slides — so use it to teach how quantification should support a thesis, not as a model for narrative structure.”
↓ No Complication/tension act — the deck never articulates what challenge, risk, or decision the audience must resolve; it is a confidence monologue
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MorganStanley · 2023 · 51p
ey e book the green transition
“A competently structured EY thought-leadership trilogy with clean MECE pillars and quantified analysis, but it reads as three parallel essays with a topic-labelled opening and a slide literally titled 'Conclusion' — useful as a teaching example for sectional build-up and recommendation slides, not for answer-first narrative or memorable closes.”
↓ No answer-first opening: the executive summary at p2 ('Addressing the climate crisis and accelerating the green transition') is a topic restatement, not a thesis — readers must wait to p5 for the first real claim
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GoldmanSachs · 2023 · 84p
Befesa Investor Presentation Goldman Sachs 4th Annual Carbonomics Conference
“A competent IR template with strong analytical fragments and quantified callouts, but structurally circular and front-loaded with topic labels — useful as a teaching example for callout discipline and quantified action titles, not for narrative architecture or closing.”
↓ Sections 01 and 03 are functionally duplicates — p.5 and p.47 carry the same €137m/-17% callout verbatim, and p.11/p.50/p.84 repeat the same 'Cash flow, net debt & leverage' page three times
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GoldmanSachs · 2023 · 33p
state of workplace study
“A competent research/thought-leadership report with stats-driven callouts and a topical three-pillar spine, but it buries the recommendation — use p8, p9, and p21 as teaching examples of action titles, not the overall structure as a Storymakers exemplar.”
↓ No complication slide — tension is implied by stats but never dramatized, so p8-p29 reads as an analytical dump
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Barclays · 2023 · 23p
mercury rising
“A polished thought-leadership trends report with strong callouts and evidence, but as a Storymakers exemplar it is a teaching case for analytical-survey decks that miss the answer-first opening and recommendation-led close — use the callout craft, not the structure.”
↓ No answer-first slide in the opening — the foreword/exec-summary pairing (pp.3–4) defers the thesis instead of leading with it
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BCG · 2024 · 7p
Transform Special Situations Index
“Short analytical index-release with a strong hook and mostly declarative titles but no resolution - use p.1-p.2 as an opening-hook exemplar, not as a full Storymakers arc.”
↓ No Resolution act - deck ends on p.7 sector data with zero recommendation, implication, or 'what leaders should do'
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LEK · 2022 · 58p
Pivoting to a High Quality Growth of Clinical Trials in China PharmaDJ x L.E.K. Clinical Development Report
“A competent, survey-driven thought-leadership report with a clear four-pillar spine and numerate titles, but it builds analytically and then fails to land — use its Act 1 setup (pp.3, 5-12) as a teaching example of thesis-plus-proof, not its resolution.”
↓ Resolution act is effectively one slide (p.48) — no prioritized recommendations, no 'so what for pharma X' translation, and no decision framework.
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PwC · 2014 · 33p
Project Management: Improving performance, reducing risk
“A competently-structured awareness deck for a board audience that uses question-based section dividers well but reads as a topic walkthrough rather than an argument — useful as a teaching example of how clear section spines do not by themselves produce a Storymakers narrative when action titles and a synthesized close are missing.”
↓ No answer-first slide in the opening — the thesis is delayed until p.10 and never restated as a single declarative claim
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RolandBerger · 2020 · 39p
Insurance landscape evolution and emergence of MGA/ MGU model
“A well-structured Asian insurance market scan with strong MECE dividers and mostly insight-bearing action titles, but it analyzes more than it argues — useful as a teaching example for section spines and metric-in-title discipline, not for closing the loop with a recommendation.”
↓ No answer-first slide: the thesis never appears in the first 3 pages — agenda promises a 'deep dive' instead of stating a finding
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misc · 2024 · 54p
The economic and social impact of investment in the nbn network Methodology Report
“A credentialed methodology report with a clean two-pillar structure and strong quantitative spine, but it buries the answer and ends without a recommendation — useful as a teaching example for sound MECE pillars, not for narrative arc or opening/closing craft.”
↓ No thesis up front: pages 1-7 are entirely scene-setting; the headline number a reader should remember is never stated in the opening